Anyway, it's called The Water's Way to Limara, but it used to be called The Garden Path to Avalon.
It's been a while since I posted the first 3 chapters of the avalon version, which don't really exist in the story anymore.
I took them down because they bothered me, and what's written in them is totally different from what I'm workin on right now.
My original story was to write something like a romance involoving a love triangle, then the triangle went away, and I focused more on the murder of the main character in a past life.
Now I'm sort of focusing on theat, but I've expanded everything, and it's as if the whole story has evolved into something totally dfferent.
Overall, whiat I'm asking of the few people who watch this almost dead DA account is to read the small excerpt I've posted and tell me what you think.
I NEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDD constructive critisicm, half the time I read my writing I honestly feel like it's complete and utter CRAP! SO tell me if you like it, if you don't like it, what I could change, etc, pretty much anything you want to say.









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"Yo MAMA!!!"
"YO GRANDMA!!!"
"Your WHOLE FAMILY!!!"
"Your cousin TWICE REMOVED!!!"
"YO GRANDMA TWICE REMOVED!....TO THE ASYLUM!!!" >D
*twitch*
-a typical conversation among friends.
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"Yo MAMA!!!"
"YO GRANDMA!!!"
"Your WHOLE FAMILY!!!"
"Your cousin TWICE REMOVED!!!"
"YO GRANDMA TWICE REMOVED!....TO THE ASYLUM!!!" >D
*twitch*
-a typical conversation among friends.
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R.I.P Zima. You were my angel for 14 years. I will never forget you and you will always live on in my
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R.I.P Zima. You were my angel for 14 years. I will never forget you and you will always live on in my
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"Yo MAMA!!!"
"YO GRANDMA!!!"
"Your WHOLE FAMILY!!!"
"Your cousin TWICE REMOVED!!!"
"YO GRANDMA TWICE REMOVED!....TO THE ASYLUM!!!" >D
*twitch*
-a typical conversation among friends.
Spread the HATE for TWILIGHT!!!!
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"Yo MAMA!!!"
"YO GRANDMA!!!"
"Your WHOLE FAMILY!!!"
"Your cousin TWICE REMOVED!!!"
"YO GRANDMA TWICE REMOVED!....TO THE ASYLUM!!!" >D
*twitch*
-a typical conversation among friends.
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"Yo MAMA!!!"
"YO GRANDMA!!!"
"Your WHOLE FAMILY!!!"
"Your cousin TWICE REMOVED!!!"
"YO GRANDMA TWICE REMOVED!....TO THE ASYLUM!!!" >D
*twitch*
-a typical conversation among friends.
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